Some people think that having a set retirement age (say 65) for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? What type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer.
Retirement
is very
essential part of our life because in old Add an article
a very
age
we are not supposed to do countinue
our Correct your spelling
continue
work
.Thus
, it is the
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apply
time
to take rest
and Correct article usage
a rest
age
our remaining days in the world. Eventhough
, we have Correct your spelling
Even though
set
of Correct article usage
a set
age
for retirement
, some people
does
not Change the verb form
do
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believe
belive
that it is unethical and opinioned that particular Correct your spelling
believe
work
has need
to leave at earlier in their Add an article
a need
the need
age
and it is adequate for their life.l totally agree with this
statement , we can discuss the kind jobs need earlier retriment and the reasons in the essay.
There are some vital reasons behind why i
believe certain Change the capitalization
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kind
of jobs need Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
retirement
at their younger age
such
as field
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fieldwork
work
, Military service, security work
and job
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jobs
need
more physical activity. Correct pronoun usage
that need
First
and foremost, these jobs need more physical strength and concentration compare
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compared
work
in Wrong verb form
working
office
. Add an article
the office
an office
Therefore
,in their old age
they will start to Add a comma
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lose
loose
their health and attack some other diseases Correct your spelling
lose
such
as diabetic
, sugar.The ramification of Replace the word
diabetes
people
at their old age
involve
in outside Change the form of the verb
involved
work
despite the hot and not taking food and medicines in
particular
interval Add an article
the particular
a particular
that is
death following cardic
arrest.Correct your spelling
cardiac
Secondly
,people
who Change preposition
for people
involved
in military service at Add a missing verb
are involved
their
younger Change the word
a
age
then
it
is the best reward government can give Correct pronoun usage
apply
that
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
decrease
their Fix the infinitive
to decrease
retirement
age
. Hence
, they would get to join with their family and can restore the
all happiness and fun when they could not perform while apart from family to serve the nation.Correct article usage
apply
Last
but not least, despite the health , people
who work
remote areas it is the best time
retun
home and Correct your spelling
return
focus
on their family before getting more Change the verb form
focuses
age
.
Furthermore
,people
who work
in ships and work
in ring
,Add an article
the ring
they
start to Correct pronoun usage
apply
be affect
their mental condition due to Change the verb form
affect
lonilenss
and working Correct your spelling
loneliness
condition
. For Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
this
reason, they required rest and mental strength .The best part is government
can do by applying the policies of voluntary Add an article
the government
retairement
. Correct your spelling
retirement
Consequently
, they can join with their family and friends would enable them to spent
their Change the form of the verb
spend
time
effectively.
To conclude, i
reiterate Change the capitalization
I
sixtyfive
years of Correct your spelling
sixty five
sixty-five
age
is not Correct your spelling
suitable
sutiable
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a sutiable
time
to leave every job. Some work
need
earlier Change the verb form
needs
retairement
especially Correct your spelling
retirement
work
which involve high physical activity.Submitted by divyajayarajan95 on
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