Some people think that having a set retirement age (say 65) for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? What type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer.

Retirement
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essential part of our life because in old
age
we are not supposed to do
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continue
our
work
.
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, it is
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time
to take
rest
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and
age
our remaining days in the world.
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, we have
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of
age
for
retirement
, some
people
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not
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that it is unethical and opinioned that particular
work
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to leave at earlier in their
age
and it is adequate for their life.l totally agree with
this
statement , we can discuss the kind jobs need earlier retriment and the reasons in the essay. There are some vital reasons behind why
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believe certain
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of jobs need
retirement
at their younger
age
such
as
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work
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work
and
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need
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more physical activity.
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and foremost, these jobs need more physical strength and concentration
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in
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.
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,in their old
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they will start to
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loose
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their health and attack some other diseases
such
as
diabetic
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, sugar.The ramification of
people
at their old
age
involve
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in outside
work
despite the hot and not taking food and medicines
in
particular
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interval
that is
death following
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cardiac
arrest.
Secondly
,
people
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who
involved
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in military service at
their
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younger
age
then
it
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is the best reward government can give
that
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is
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their
retirement
age
.
Hence
, they would get to join with their family and can restore
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all happiness and fun when they could not perform while apart from family to serve the nation.
Last
but not least, despite the health ,
people
who
work
remote areas it is the best
time
retun
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return
home and
focus
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on their family before getting more
age
.
Furthermore
,
people
who
work
in ships and
work
in
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,
they
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start to
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their mental condition due to
lonilenss
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loneliness
and working
condition
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. For
this
reason, they required rest and mental strength .The best part is
government
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can do by applying the policies of voluntary
retairement
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retirement
.
Consequently
, they can join with their family and friends would enable them to
spent
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their
time
effectively. To conclude,
i
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reiterate
sixtyfive
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sixty five
sixty-five
years of
age
is not
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suitable
sutiable
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time
to leave every job. Some
work
need
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earlier
retairement
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retirement
especially
work
which involve high physical activity.
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