Some people think that having a set retirement age (say 65) for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? What type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer.
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retirement
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age
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loose
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age
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arrest.Correct your spelling
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age
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apply
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their mental condition due to Change the verb form
affect
lonilenss
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loneliness
condition
. For Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
this
reason, they required rest and mental strength .The best part is Linking Words
government
can do by applying the policies of voluntary Add an article
the government
retairement
. Correct your spelling
retirement
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spent
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time
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sixty five
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suitable
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work
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need
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needs
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retirement
work
which involve high physical activity.Use synonyms
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