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The beat way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent to you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any examples.

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Multinational organizations can be found in all major cities around the world these days. Working for
global
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 firm is thought by many to be the most effective
way
 to comprehend
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different cultures.
Although
 working for
such
a companies
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rendersthe
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renders the
 opportunity to mix with people from a variety of lifestyle backgrounds, I would
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argue
agree
 that
this
 is not necessarily the best method to learn about other cultures. There is no doubt that for some
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, working for universal industries will
enshance
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enhance
 their understanding of other
civilization
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. The
first
 reason could be that in a worldwide company, one can learn about the customs and traditions of other countries through mixing
wit
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with
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 people from different backgrounds who
work
 in the company or in liaising with colleagues abroad. Exposure to other foreign dialects is
also
 likely, something that gives a much greater depth of understanding of a culture. There may
also
 be a chance to relocate to
work
 in another nation which would mean complete immersion in that culture. Despite the fact that working for
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 group of companies can provide opportunities for
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 understanding of diverse cultures, there are a number of
reason
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reasons
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 that it is not necessarily the best
way
.
Firstly
 there is no guarantee that you will be a person who gets
such
 exposure
of
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 other's
way
 of life as it
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 on your position within the company. Not all employees have roles where they need to regularly mix with the crowd.
Moreover
, there are
also
 other excellent ways to aspire
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 a goal.
For instance
, many individuals
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 travel all through the
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globe
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glob
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globe
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 and
this
 is
also
 an opportunity to meet and spend time with
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the public
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 from other countries. It is
also
 possible to do voluntary
work
 with organizations and would mean you may meet a mix of
cosmopolitan
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the cosmopolitan
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 mob rather than just those who
work
 in companies. To conclude, bearing in mind the above information and deliberating all facts, it can be deduced that even though the potential ways in which working for a global organization can result in collaborating with people from
different
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 heritage, I believe that it cannot be assumed that
this
 is the only the best
way
 as there are other options
also
.
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