Some people believe that children's time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
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of the
significant
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significance
future
. Some think that after leaving schools in Use synonyms
evening
kid's free time should be used rely on Correct article usage
the evening
extra curricular
activities while others say that a child should be Correct your spelling
extracurricular
needed
leisure hour to playing the games and taking relax. Replace the word
need
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discuss
both viewpoints, I formally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.
On the one hand, when the offsprings Change the verb form
discusses
plays
in their's evening time without going any extra classes while they would be active and Change the verb form
play
physically
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physical
health
. Replace the word
healthy
In other words
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contineous
learning method can lead to bringing more mental diseases like depression and stress, Correct your spelling
continuous
thus
, the kids never Linking Words
be
active and they might be attempted suicide due to they cannot control Change the verb form
are
over burden
like adults. Correct your spelling
overburden
For example
, a recent report by the Times of India said that more Linking Words
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60% of the Correct your spelling
than
offsprings
are affected by attending a plethora Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
classes
after school finishes Change preposition
of classes
everyday
. Replace the word
every day
In addition
, they are playing and take resting while their mind is thi8nking creatively and innovatively, Linking Words
consequently
, they will Linking Words
be become
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become
have become
a
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apply
creater
in the Correct your spelling
creator
crater
future
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, the children should be taken Linking Words
free
time and Add an article
the free
playing
fun when after school.
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play
On the other hand
, an Linking Words
Correct your spelling
extracurricular
extra curricular
performance can be given more skills and talent in order to they will be gotten a good job in any field, they never only rely on Correct your spelling
extracurricular
acedemic
employment. Correct your spelling
academic
For example
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today's
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in today's
busy
world, the employer Add an article
a busy
are
expected tremendously Change the verb form
is
such
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multi-talented
person, Add an article
a multi-talented
hence
, the parents should be filled to their' little one's schedule being busy in outside class.
To conclude, certainly, offspring should be needed a Linking Words
realxation
Correct your spelling
relaxation
second
for playing while their mind and health is very strong and will bring creative thought. Linking Words
An extra
Correct the article-noun agreement
Extra
classes
can help for will get a good job in Fix the agreement mistake
class
future
and they never rely on one field. In my opinion, about Use synonyms
this
, children should need a relaxation Linking Words
second
for playing because they are very small age people so the parents never should be treated to their like mature person and they will enjoy their remarkable moments, Linking Words
this
period cannot come in Linking Words
future
.Use synonyms
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