Some people believe that children's time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Childhood

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period is

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utmost

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and gives more happiness to all due to a child does not think about their

future

. Some think that after leaving schools in

evening

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the evening

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kid's free time should be used rely on

extra curricular

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extracurricular

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activities while others say that a child should be

needed

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leisure hour to playing the games and taking relax.

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discuss

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both viewpoints, I formally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand, when the offsprings

plays

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in their's evening time without going any extra classes while they would be active and

physically

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physical

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health

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.

In other words

,

contineous

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continuous

learning method can lead to bringing more mental diseases like depression and stress,

thus

, the kids never

be

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active and they might be attempted suicide due to they cannot control

over burden

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overburden

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like adults.

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, a recent report by the Times of India said that more

tahn

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than

60% of the

offsprings

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are affected by attending a plethora

classes

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of classes

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after school finishes

everyday

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.

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, they are playing and take resting while their mind is thi8nking creatively and innovatively,

consequently

, they will

be become

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a

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apply

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creater

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creator

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in the

future

.

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, the children should be taken

free

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time and

playing

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play

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fun when after school.

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, an

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extracurricular

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extra curricular

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extracurricular

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performance can be given more skills and talent in order to they will be gotten a good job in any field, they never only rely on

acedemic

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academic

employment.

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,

today's

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in today's

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busy

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world, the employer

are

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expected tremendously

such

as

multi-talented

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person,

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, the parents should be filled to their' little one's schedule being busy in outside class. To conclude, certainly, offspring should be needed a

realxation

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relaxation

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for playing while their mind and health is very strong and will bring creative thought.

An extra

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classes

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class

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can help for will get a good job in

future

and they never rely on one field. In my opinion, about

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, children should need a relaxation

second

for playing because they are very small age people so the parents never should be treated to their like mature person and they will enjoy their remarkable moments,

this

period cannot come in

future

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