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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

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Nowadays, moving abroad to live or study is becoming increasingly popular. For a number of individuals, especially young adults, the chance of living overseas for an extended period of time is an attractive one.
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 why heading abroad is popular and some challenges to be overcome.
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 and foremost, let’s look at the advantages of moving away. One of the main positives of heading overseas is that it broadens your horizon. What I mean by
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 is that you have the chance to meet people from various cultural backgrounds and learn to cope with foreign customs and food.
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 can make you more rounded as a person.
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, moving abroad can lead you to a better quality of life. Take, British nationals, for
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example. Thousands of people from
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 move to Spain and Australia every year. These countries have
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 a better work-life balance.
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, by living overseas, you can gain qualifications and foreign dialect skills which may improve promotion prospects when you return. On the other side of the argument, the
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 country is culture shock. To be more precise, numerous people who take a year off find it hard to cope with the language barrier, the food, and general cultural differences.
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 frequently leads to homesickness and in a number of cases sense of isolation.
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, one more issue is that it is difficult to start a new life from scratch.
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 country, you must make new friends and find your place in the community.
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 process takes time and can be especially challenging if there is
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life in
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 nation is never easy. You need to weigh up the pros of
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 lifestyle, and weather, and the cons of culture shock and language barrier. Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives.
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