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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
Two dangerous materials that everybody
use
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 in their daily diet are salt and
sugar
. Side effects of salt and
sugar
 are like
use
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using
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 heroin. Everyone should reduce
use
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the use
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these
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of these
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 two materials. Many
of
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fruits have
sugar
 and we should know them and eat them less.
Sugar
 is cheap and everyone can buy
large
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 amount of it. Our body needs energy for doing everything. A part of
this
 energy will be achieved by blood glucose levels. We can
use
 fruit
instead
 of
sugar
. In our country, brown
sugar
 is expensive and it has fewer side effects
in
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compare
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 with white
sugar
. Because of its price, most
of
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the
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people
use
 white
sugar
. I think if white
sugar
 will be expensive at least half of
people
 do not
use
 it. They will
use
 more fruit and it is healthier. I think some
people
 disagree with my opinion because removing
sugar
of
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 their life is very hard for them and they can not
image
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 a life without
sugar
. They
prefer
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use
 less
sugar
instead
 of
remove
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 it. If somebody
show
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shows
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 them a film that shows how
do
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sugar
 and salt influence the body
specially
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 the heart, they absolutely
use less
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useless
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. In conclusion, I think our body needs sugary ingredients, but we can
use
 many healthy materials
instead
od
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of
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sugar
. The best action is
increasing
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to increase
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 the price of
sugar
 products step by step. So,
people
 buy
this
 product less and try to test other
thing
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things
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 and will see that a life without
sugar
 is possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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