Some people say that professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers who make greater contributions to society should be paid more than those people in the field of sports and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days celebrities get much more money than other
professions
such
as doctors, teachers, engineers and etc. The former
professions
are not so important as the
last
ones. I would stick
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opinion that the social
specialty
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should be paid more than it is now. In
this
,essay we will try to look at each side, and I hope will find why a situation is like
this
. On the one hand actors, singers and other entertainment persons work hard and their salary fit
to
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their performance. It's clear that
olimpic
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Olympic
sportsmen work really a lot, at least four years to the
next
game, and in a fact just only three medals exist for each type of type discipline. And their work looks great when
finally
he or she gets it.
Furthermore
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some actors have to drop weight
for example
from 120kg to 60 in 3 months or vice versa, just only for one episode. Whereas it take a place some other celebrities who became a famous due to done very simple thing like funny dance, song and so on, and social networks help them to be known for the wide public. Others like companies try to use it
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and offer them money for the advertisement of their products. So
last
ones get easy cash, and,
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try to find
next
simple thing.
This
looks not so great as the former two samples.
On the other
hand
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other
professions
whiches need more than entertainment and they do really necessary things,
such
as electricity, mobile communication, farmers, doctors and nurse and so on.
This
is a
professions
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a lot and without,
them
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human life on the earth might look worse. But like everywhere in
this
profession exist persons who got their money even their professional level is not fit to their salary. So, in conclusion, I see both sides have
own
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favourites which paid
according
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their real hard effort, and unfortunately in entertainment and social workers areas exist persons who paid even they not sute to their salary.
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