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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. how far do you agree or disagree with the above views?

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There is no doubt that,
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 is
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 a prominent role in human's life. The question is, is necessary to complete a high
education
 in the
university
 after
graduated
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 from secondary
school
 or it is better
to
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people
 start working and gain experience after graduation from
school
 to guarantee a perfect
job
? In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of
first
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 argument, many
people
 argue that they have
a better
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a better option
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options
 to getting a better
job
 when they complete a course of
university
education
. The main reason to support
this
 claim is that
students
 who are educated from
university
they
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have
a
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 best knowledge than
students
 who
are does
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 not
accomplishment
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their
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they're
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studied
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studies
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. To illustrate,
students
 receive an
advance
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 level of
education
 in the
university
, and it helps them improve their knowledge and skills.
In other words
,
university
 graduates are more knowledgeable and skilled.
Hence
, they have
a top
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top options
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options
 to get a better
job
.
Also
,
students
 with
a higher academic qualifications
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higher academic qualifications
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 have
a better
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better options
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options
 in
recieve
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receive
 promotions.
Moreover
,
people
 who want to get a prestigious
job
 should complete their
education
 in
university
.
However
, some
people
 believe that
gain
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 experience after graduating from
school
immediately
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 more important than
complete
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completing
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 a course of
university
education
.
Nevertheless
, if the
students
 do not complete their higher
education
 in
university
, they will have limited
options
 for work in various types of jobs. As persons with academic qualifications get of
lower paid
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. In conclusion,
although
 most
people
 argue that it is necessary for
students
 to work after
school
 and gain experience. I believe that
,
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students
 must
accomplishment
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 their
education
 in
university
 to get diverse and better
options
 for jobs in life.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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