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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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t is argued that whether it is
manufacturers
 and
supermarkets
 or consumers’ responsibility to reduce the volume of packaging of
goods
. In my point of view, I think that it is a shared responsibility for both producers, sellers and buyers to diminish the amount of packing of
goods
. On the one hand, it is
apparently
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 that
manufacturers
 and
supermarkets
is
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are
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 responsible for reducing the amount of packaging of
goods
, and
this
 is actually under their ability.
In
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production
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a production
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 perspective,
manufacturers
 can absolutely design and produce products in the size and shape and form which is best material saving. And by doing so, they might even have
better
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 profit margin which stems from less material consumed.
In
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trading
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 perspective,
supermarkets
 definitely can promote those light-packing
goods
 by reserving them the best visible positions on the shelves or
put
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 them in the weekly leaflets so that they are eye-catching and appealing to the buyers.
On the other hand
, it does not mean that consumers are not involved in reducing the commercial packaging,
in contrast
, they are a deciding factor for producers to choose which products or packaging should be continued producing. Consumers can avoid buying
goods
 with a lot of packaging to share the above-mentioned responsibility.
For example
, two products might have similar contents but different coverings, the wise and responsible choice should be the one with less complicated or heavy packaging because it would cost less for the manufacturer to produce and
therefore
 lower price should be expected. And, that action would help the environment in long term too. In conclusion, in my point of view, both
manufacturers
,
supermarkets
 and consumers are responsible for
diminish
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 the volume of packaging of
goods
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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