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the percentage of adults of different age groups using the Internet between 2003 and 2006, in the Great Britain.

The given bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of adults of different age groups using the
Internet
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 between 2003 and 2006, in Great Britain. Overall, adults between 16 and 44 showed the greatest usage of the
Internet
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 and the users grew with the time regardless of their age. But, the over 65s had the least
percentage
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 of
Internet
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 users.  The main users of the
Internet
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 were young adults aged between 16 and 24 years. In 2003 and 2004, they shared the same
percentage
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, which was 80%. In 2005,
this
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 figure increased significantly to 100% but decreased slightly to 90% in the
next
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 year.  We can see from the chart that all the age groups experienced an upward trend as far as their daily use of the
Internet
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 is concerned. In the 25-44 group, there was a gradual growth in the
percentage
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, from 50% to 80%, between 2003 and 2006. There was a similar increase for the 45 to 54 years olds, rising from 60% in 2003 to 80% in 2006. As for the other groups,
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 had minor fluctuation, the overall trend was upwards.

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