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the proportion of Whole world of population in four various countries in three different year with the five years interval,starting from 1950 and forecasted for figures 2050.

The given bar graph illustrates the proportion of the whole world of the population in four various countries in three different years with the five years interval,starting from 1950 and forecasted for figures 2050.The general overview here is that China indicated the greatest amount of world population,
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, Japan had the least percentage of the population. According to the graph, it can be seen that in 1950 the highest amount of citizenry was China, accounting for over 25%. In 2000,
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 figure decreased slightly to approximately 24% and it is projected a dramatic drop to under 20% in the
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 five decades.
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, India experienced an upward trend in their citizenry over the period. There was a gradual growth in their proportion, from exactly 15% to approximately 19
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between 1950 and 2000, and
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 figure will reach over 20% in 2050. We can see from the graph that both The USA and Japan experienced a downward trend between 1950 and 2000. In The USA, there was a mere decline in percentage,from exactly 10% to approximately 7% which will be the same percentage in 2050.
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, there was a similar decline for Japan, dropping from 5% in 1950 to around 4% in 2000,and their number will fall minimally by around 2% over the
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 50 years.

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