Task 2 : Some people believe that if a police force carries guns, this encourages a higher level of violence in that society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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years. Overall, it is worth highlighting that those using Italian and
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others to become the most popular language from 1996. In 1986, about 240,000
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who spoke
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, followed by Italian (150,000),
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in 2011, the latter stabilized from 2006 to final year at about 100,000
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. An opposite pattern is evident in the statistics of
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speaking Arabic was
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climb, amounting to 150,000
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in 2011. The number of people speaking
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,
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in 1996, which surpassed those speaking
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • law enforcement
  • escalate
  • deter
  • overreaction
  • perceived safety
  • misuse of power
  • deterrent effect
  • law and order
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • civil liberties
  • use of lethal force
  • accountability
  • arms race
  • militarization
  • social fabric
  • statistical evidence
  • cultural attitudes
  • criminal behavior
  • policy implications
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