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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there are various subjects in
school
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 for students to prepare for higher education and improve their life skills.
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, many
people
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 say that the chemistry of
food
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 and the method of preparing a meal should be taught in
school
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.
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, there are many
people
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 who disagree with the
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 opinion.
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, Both views will be outlined in the following paragraphs.
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, due to the fact that
food
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 is necessary for humans, incorporating the science of
food
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 and how to arrange it into the
school
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 curriculum will allow the students to gain more useful capabilities.
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,
people
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 who do not know how to cook tend to have more expenses because of buying ready-to-eat
food
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, which is expensive and unhealthy, than
people
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 who can prepare meals by themselves.
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, knowledge about
food
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 could be learned from anywhere,
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 as the internet, books, TV programs, and
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 their parents.
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, learning to cook may not be necessary to learn in
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.
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, the additional subjects may cause higher levels of stress in children.
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, they should learn what is really important. To summarize, the courses in
food
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 science and cooking have both advantages and disadvantages. From my point of view, students should be able to choose what they prefer to study.
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 solution could reduce their pressure if they do not want to do it.
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, if the children are interested in the
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 field,
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 may lead to an improvement in their ability to live.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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