when companies want to employ some staff, they usually ask them some personal questions. Some people say this is a good thing, while others believe it is wrong. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

when you want to apply for a job, the employers may ask you
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for give
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them personal
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about yourself.
This
issue may be unpleasant for you or not. in
this
regard, some of
this
information
may be related and useful, but some are futile. some people believe that
information
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as marital status is a private topic, and
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issue should not affect the rights of humans to work.
on the other
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other people say knowing some personal
information
of employees by their employers can be beneficial. Because they can have better relationships and engagement with each other when employers know about some details of the lives of their employees. according to the issues raised, I think personal
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, hobbies,moral
chraterristics
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characteristics
, marital status and even the religion of employees can be helpful if it is not as an advantage for their hiring.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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