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People are having more and more sugar based drinks.What are the reasons?What are the soulutions to make people drink less?

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Nowadays
people
 are consuming more sweetened
drinks
.
This
 could be attributed to
extensive
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 advertisement. One would wonder what government can do to discourage
this
 trend. I think that by levying a high tax
to
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 companies that manufacture
sugar based
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drinks
,
this
 would be reduced. One of the main reasons for
increased
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 intake of
sugar based
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sugar-based
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drinks
 is extensive advertisements. Companies that produce these
drinks
boadcast
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broadcast
 enticing yet deceptive
advertspromising
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adverts promising
not
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 just a sweet sensation to the tongue but
alsoquenching
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also quenching
 of thirst.
Moreover
, a boost in blood glucose levels and
enerygy
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energy
 levels is almost always guaranteed. Children and young
people
aare
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are
 easily lured by these adverts. Coca Cola is a prime example with the tag line "taste the feeling". In order to reduce the consumption of sweetened
drinks
,
government
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 could impose
a
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apply
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higher
taxon
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tax on
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 companies that make these
drinks
. The
compaies
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companies
 would
the
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apply
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project the tax
burdenon
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burden on
 their customers by selling products expensively. Fewer
people
 will be able to afford them
hence
, reducing purchase and consumption.
In other words
,
people
 would buy less
sugar based
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drinks
 and more of the healthier natural
alternatves
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alternatives
alternative
.
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