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time spent on smartphone and tablet by six various categories.

The given pie charts illustrate the information about
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 spent on
smartphones
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 and tablets by six various categories. The general overview here is that the games were the most popular activity spent on these two devices, whereas the least amount of
time
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 was spent on the news by smartphone compared to utilities by
tablet
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. According to the charts, it can be seen that people spent 57% of their
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 on games by
tablet
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 as compose to
smartphones
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 at only 37%.
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,
time
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 spent by
smartphones
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 on social networks was 14% higher than on tablets ,which was 15%.
Similarly
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, more
time
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 was spent on utilities by smartphone compared to a mere 3% by
tablet
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.
On the contrary
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,
time
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 spent on music and videos by
tablet
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 was higher than on
smartphones
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 (around 13% and 8% respectively).
Moreover
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, the people who spent their
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 on the other activities by
tablet
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 accounted for 8%, while was spent on
smartphones
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 only 5%.
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, Neither two devices were spent low
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 on the news which accounted for 3% by
smartphones
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 but 4% by
tablet
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