Some people think that having a retirement age ( e.g 65 years ) for everybody ,regardless of occupation is unfair .They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earliest age . Do you agree or disagree? Which type or workers do you think should benefits from early retirements.

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essay, I will be discussed my point of view that the employees have to enjoy early retirements benefits if the type of their

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is hard and if they have the main responsibility of growing up their children ,despite

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policy could result in unfair decisions sometimes. Blue-collar

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in a very hard condition every day

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that ,they are not able to continue to

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field for a long period of time. Women's and single parents ,

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, have the responsibility to grow up their children and to do all the housework as a consequence to put a lot of effort into their everyday lives.An example of

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and at the same time has to prepare everything for their families everyday living,

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, to feel more tired day by day and their energy level to drop off as they become elder. Retirement

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the same age for all the

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,prevent the government and politicians from unfair decisions and make all the

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equally. If

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,decide single parents to receive

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that will be unfair for

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society like disabled people. In summary, having an early retirement age for some

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like tradie and women can be very beneficial for their health due to their type of occupation but at the same time could be unfair. In my opinion ,the pros outweigh the cons and a number of

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especially those who do physical

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deserve pension benefits earlier than the white-collar

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