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When a person spends most of his or her time working a job with little job satisfaction, their life loses meaning. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Job
 satisfaction is vital when applying for a placement in any organisation. Some people
work
 long
hours
 and are not feeling fulfilled while others do.
This
 essay strongly agrees that when an active
staff
 is dissatisfied with his
job
,
time
 invested becomes wasted and life seems unmeaningful to him.
This
 could be a result of a lack of
career
 growth and a bad welfare package offered by the employer. Working in an organisation that supports employees'
career
 prosperity is important when
job
 hunting.
This
 can be researched by gathering information from the company's website through the employee welfare page. A
job
 seeker,
for instance
, during an interview can ask a potential employer about training the company offers their personnel.
This
 will enable the applicant to know if he/she will attain a
career
 advancement if possibly selected and the
time
 to be spent in
such
 an institution is worthwhile.
Thus
, bad impressions
such
 as regrets, wasted
time
 and unaccomplished goals are eliminated.
Also
, welfare package is another factor that determines whether the
staff
 is happy with his/her appointment. Most people
work
 in order to earn a living and take care of their family despite working long
hours
. When their salary cannot cater for their needs, frustration sets in.
For example
, a medical doctor earning less than $1000 per month feels terrible because
this
 salary cannot take care of his needs. The more attractive the incentives, the more people are willing to spend
hours
 in any occupation and feel satisfied.
However
, some organisations do not offer motivational incentives which affect
staff
's performance and depression is not far from
such
 workers.
Staff
 is more productive at
work
 when they are happy with their
job
 and can see the growth in their chosen endeavour even if the salary is not taking care of all their needs.
Thus
, bad emotions would not affect their performance and
time
 spent because there are various
work
 benefits. In conclusion, full-
time
 and part-
time
 workers are less satisfied with their
work
 when the organisation has
career
 advancement programs and attractive compensation packages for their
staff
.
This
 motivates them and the future looks brighter for the workers to undergo long
hours
 shifts without fear of what tomorrow holds.
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