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It’s time to ban social media. It has been shown that it has made life worse for people all over the world, from politics, to self-image, to the spread of disinformation. It is a social experiment that has not worked and it is time to say goodbye.To what extent do you agree with the above statement?

#it’s #time #ban #media #life #people #world #politics #self-image #spread #disinformation #experiment #goodbye
n my opinion, I think just should ban social
media
 in where like school, working time, restaurants, and coffee shops... Because these places need high concentration including studying, working, and communicating with people around
instead
 of plugging away the phone. Social
media
 platforms enable us to overcome geographic and ideological barriers and connect with persons we would not have been able to meet
otherwise
. Obviously, some too passionate financial and sports viewpoints will make their way into your feed, but it
also
 lets you
to
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learn about organizations and opinions you may not encounter in your daily life. Social
media
, especially if you live in a distant or non-diverse region, may expose you to characters and perspectives you would not
otherwise
 contact. New books, movies, hobbies, and interests all contribute to a
well
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 worldview. If you've recently relocated, social
media
 might help you form a network based on common interests or issues. And while Facebook can be kind of a punchline online, if you sift through the spam and use it to your advantage, it can be a worthwhile networking tool and resource for professional development. Depending on your sector, Twitter, Instagram, or lesser-known sites may be just what your job requires to achieve success.
This
 is by no means an exhaustive list. If you're thinking of quitting social
media
, do your own research. Yes, social
media
 is harmful. It's
also
 quite excellent. It depends on how you use them, like with most things on the internet. Filter out the anxiety, restrict your social
media
 exposure,
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 it for the appropriate reasons, and add your own optimism to your online environment. If you feel like social
media
 is making you unhappy, it may be time to disconnect. Simply establish a strategy to replace the good that you do discover on social
media
.
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