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The UK people gives money to charity by five various age groups between 1990 and 2010.

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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of UK
people
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 who gives money to charity by five various age groups between 1990 and 2010. The general overview here is that in 1990 association of the population aged 36 to 50
years
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 spent the most on charity, while the majority of the money to fund was spent by
people
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 in age 51 to 65
years
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 after 20
years
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 later. According to the chart, it can be seen that in 1990, the mature
people
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 ( aged 36 to 50) spent about over 40% on funds. There was a significant movement after passing twenty
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,
this
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 number dropped steadily by 5% to exactly 35%.
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, the figure for the donation of the Adult(26 to 35years) was
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 decreased gradually by approximately 7% to 23%, whereas the fund from the group of a teenager (18-25years) experienced a remarkable decline by 10% to only 7% in 2010.
On the contrary
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, the association of the elderly population experienced an upward trend in their endowment number. A group of age 55 to 65
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, there was a slight growth in their charity amount, from exactly 35% to almost 40% in 2010.
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, the donation amount of aged
people
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 (65 and over) rose minimally to 35%.

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