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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons relevant
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The charts below provide the percentage of
water
 usage for three different purposes in six different
countries
 of the world.
Overall
, it is obvious that most
countries
 use
water
especially
Add the comma(s)
,especially
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 for agricultural purposes except the two
countries
 which utilize
water
 for industrial usage
whereas
Correct word choice
where
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 using
water
 for households in all
countries
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 the lowest.
To begin
 with,
it is clear that
 a major portion of
water
 consumption could be found in the agricultural sector. More than 80 % of
water
 in Africa and Asia is consumed for
this
 purpose followed by South America with 71% but it is only 39% and 32% for
this
 purpose in North America and Europe respectively.
In contrast
, Europe and North America use most of their
water
 for a different purpose with approximately half of their
water
 resource consumed by the industrial sector. The proportion is far higher than the numbers found in other areas where they range from 5% to 12%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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