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The growth of online shopping will one day lead all shops in towns and cities closing.

#growth #shops #towns #cities
In today's digital world, online shopping gained immense popularity among
people
 of different age groups because of many advantages.
Firstly
 there is
ease
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the ease
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 of shopping from anywhere and anytime, whether at home or at work
people
 can buy anything without
pressure
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the pressure
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 of going outside at a particular time.
Moreover
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 it is less time consuming and beneficial for
specially abled
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 and medically sick patients.
In addition
 due to
recent
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pandemic
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people
 got scared to go outside as going for traditional shopping one can easily get infected,
therefore
 online shopping is definitely a boon.
Furthermore
 due to expanding online stores and online shopping portals
people
 are offered huge discounts especially during festivals. So
people
 can save more rather than
spending
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 their
hardearned
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hard earned
hard-earned
 money on traditional shopping. There are easy return, exchange and refund facilities available
that is
also
 beneficial if someone wants to change or replace the purchased
product
. There are easy return, exchange and refund facilities available
that is
also
 beneficial if someone wants to change or replace the purchased
product
.
However
, there are some disadvantages related to it
such
 as payment security, more time taken for
product
 delivery, scam by giving damaged or used
product
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products
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.
On
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concluding
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, I would agree that online shopping will close the shops in town and cities. As there are some disadvantages related to it but that gets overshadowed by the advantages of online shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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