The growth of online shopping will one day lead all shops in towns and cities closing.

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In today's digital world, online shopping gained immense popularity among
people
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of different age groups because of many advantages.
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there is
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of shopping from anywhere and anytime, whether at home or at work
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can buy anything without
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of going outside at a particular time.
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it is less time consuming and beneficial for
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and medically sick patients.
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due to
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pandemic
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people
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got scared to go outside as going for traditional shopping one can easily get infected,
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online shopping is definitely a boon.
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due to expanding online stores and online shopping portals
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are offered huge discounts especially during festivals. So
people
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can save more rather than
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money on traditional shopping. There are easy return, exchange and refund facilities available
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beneficial if someone wants to change or replace the purchased
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. There are easy return, exchange and refund facilities available
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also
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beneficial if someone wants to change or replace the purchased
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.
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, there are some disadvantages related to it
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as payment security, more time taken for
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delivery, scam by giving damaged or used
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product
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, I would agree that online shopping will close the shops in town and cities. As there are some disadvantages related to it but that gets overshadowed by the advantages of online shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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