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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, communities have improved the female´s position around the world. While some people believe that being empowered does not mean diminishing the gap between sexes, others think, the gender gap is shorter. It can be agreed, there is still a huge difference between women and men in most countries.
This
 essay will elaborate on
this
 inequal issue. At the outset, for over the past 50 years, girls have suffered prejudice about whether being competent for the job position or not.
This
 terrible problem has passed from generation to generation due to birth license, and maternal complexity.
For example
, some companies prefer to hire a boy because they do not want to
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 an employee during the time in which the baby´s duties come ahead. For
this
 reason, the disparity between gender is not solved almost everywhere.
In addition
, there are numerous other reasons in which equal societies are a utopia in the present moment, but the most one is rooted in the fact that ladies tackle harassment every time. Gentlemen, who are physically stronger, use
this
 body characteristic as a power to force women to do what they want. As an illustration, rape and other sexual abuse to females are still concerns to be handled by employers in rich or poor countries.
Consequently
, the social empowerment of men over women still needs to be solved. From what has been discussed above, the achievement of gender equality is still trouble
although
 some people think that there is not
this
 gap. In my opinion, more effort should be done to allow similar opportunities and power inside societies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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