Some people think that one should choose a job based on salary in order to provide security for the family. Do you think money is an important factor when choosing a job? What other factors should be considered?

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would argue that financial security is the principal reason for their choice of occupation. Some would
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argue that money is a key motivator.
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, my personal belief is that whilst money is important, other
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have a significant bearing. Primarily,
people
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go out to work in order to earn money to provide for themselves and their families. As
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, continued financial stability and security are important
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which need to be borne in mind when looking for a new
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. Without a doubt, one of the first things which
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look at when they scan
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advertisements is the salary scale. If
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does not meet the expectations of an individual, or more importantly at least match their current level of pay, it is highly likely that a decision will be reached that the particular position is not deemed to be suitable.
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, some would suggest that choosing a
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based solely on the salary offered is
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. They are likely to point to
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including the satisfaction that can be gained in undertaking a rewarding position. For example, nurses and teachers carry out roles which are not always
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.
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, they are likely to achieve high levels of
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satisfaction which contributes to their intrinsic motivation. The social benefits of working are
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important.
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gives
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the chance to interact socially, both in and out of the workplace. Examples of
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might be the chance to talk to
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colleagues over a coffee in the staffroom or liaising with colleagues at a social occasion after work.
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, the chance to work for a reputable organisation, opportunities for professional development and undertaking a role that you are committed to are
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other important
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, whilst some would choose remuneration as the fundamental consideration when searching for a new role, I would argue that other considerations have an equal weighting.
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