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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company or organisation .why might this be the case? What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In many nations around the world, most people prefer to be working as self-staff relative to many organizations and companies.
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 is because they have to face whatever they use property in their business must depend upon their own cash.
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, most business people are about to think many times before starting their own job, because once loss will happen they should balance their life. For these reasons,
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people are getting afraid to be working as
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self-employed. Despite
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, there is a number of significant advantages to having a self-worker. A key reason for
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 is that the individual employers do not contribute to others and they stand their own field.
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, it leads to doing the work in a free manner.
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, most of the women in global, they used to prefered working as self-employment,
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 can lead to balance both family and working life. Following
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, the young generation and women were more
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 in doing their self job without any disturbance
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 as the government provides
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 less interest. In conclusion,
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 there are drawbacks to having a self-employes, it is clear that the individual workers are more significant contribution
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self-employment is beneficial to their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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