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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via Internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion

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 scenario,
Internet
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 plays a
curical
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crucial
critical
 role in every person life and we can not think
our
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 lives without
internet
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. It is very easy to shop and
work
 online because of
internet
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the internet
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. In my opinion, I considered that there are both merits and demerits to
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 of
internet
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. There are many reasons why
people
 prefer online shopping via
internet
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. The
first
 and foremost important thing is saving
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time. Both women and men are working so they can not spend time
for
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shopping.
In addition
,
internet
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 is
convenient
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 option for shopping.
For example
,
people
 do not need to go physically
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shopping mall or a local store for shopping because they can easily
shopping
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be shopping
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 from online websites and applications by using
interent
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internet
.
Therefore
,
internet
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 can
gives
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 immense benefits to
people
. Another point to consider is that
internet
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the internet
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 has become an indispensable part
to
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 everyone.
People
 can do
work
 from home without going to
office
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the office
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 via
interent
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internet
.
Moreover
,
people
 communicate with their friends and family who live
any
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 corner of the world. For
instace
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instance
,
one
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 survey has conducted by
professor
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of
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Harwad
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Harvard
Harward
 University, there are 70% of
people
 across the world
who
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use
internet
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 for
work
 and
coomunication
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communication
 without getting
any
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into any
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 trouble.
Hence
,
internet
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 is helpful in both ways individuals and professionals.
On the other hand
,
interent
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internet
 has
also
 negative development.
Firstly
,
people
 would not give importance
face-to-face
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to face-to-face
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 conversation.
Secondly
, employees do not
work
 properly at home because they do not have employer pressure.
Finally
,
people
 will forget the amazing experience of physical shopping. In conclusion,
Internet
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 is
very
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 useful and necessary
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 in modern life as it gives more advantages to the world, but some drawbacks should not be neglected.
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