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Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you a little time with family and friends or a lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more time with family and friends? Explain your choice, using specific reasons and details.

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Teaching is very much important for
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to do new things.
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 would learn to interact and would be more active in
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. New
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activities
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skills
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 consist of teaming up with another student and finishing the task.
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 teaming up with a student would create a self-learning of how to socialize.
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, teaching is important but going to
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 and getting
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an education
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 plays a crucial role. To Conclude, Many believe that
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's development is best when
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is
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 taught at home but, I strongly disagree
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this
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 statement as it is important to go to
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 where they can learn new things and with the help of
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the latest
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 curriculum
children
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 get updated knowledge.
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