IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

Improvements in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#improvements #health #education #trade #development #nations #governments #responsibility #areas
What techniques have you tried to help you relax? There are many ways by which you can reduce your stress. We are going to check them one by one. 1) Do yoga
This
 way might be familiar
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
 all people and they have done it at least once in their entire
life
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
show examples
.
This
 exercise causes you to focus on your breath and body. Endorphins from exercise are
so
Rephrase
very
show examples
 effective
for
Change preposition
in
show examples
 reducing stress. It is better to listen to calm music like the sound of nature and the sea
while
 doing yoga. 2) Take
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
time
 management Determine a specific
time
 of day for yourself. Put your cell phone in aeroplane mode. Don’t have any notifications and avoid stressful emails or SMS. Do your favourite things like listening to music, watching movies, walking with your pet, cooking and so on. Most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people are sad because of
workload
Correct article usage
the workload
show examples
 and they can’t balance their jobs and free
time
. They usually work the whole day without devoting specific
time
 for themselves. Do you know how it can be harmful to your body and soul? I recommend you
to
Fix the infinitive
apply
show examples
make a list and write down your favourite things and
then
 do them in your free
time
 3) Color
therapy
 Have you ever heard about
this
? Do you think
this
 way can be as useful as yoga? Colour
therapy
 has originated in Egypt. They believed that the power of colour can promote our body and mental illness. There are many colours around us and each one of them has a special meaning.
For instance
, green and blue are used for Pease and red Pease and love respectively. If you are stressed, you can use
this
 method of colour
therapy
. It will cause your energy to increase. 4) Humor
therapy
This
 method is called the power of smile and laughter. Do humour
therapy
 to make yourself smile for the simplest things. These days most scientists have been searching
about
Change preposition
for
show examples
this
 method and they believe that there is a relationship between promoting sickness and smiling. It can be used as an effective way to heal physical and mental illnesses.
Submitted by TUTOO on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
What to do next:
Look at other essays: