Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like.others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays the majority of
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believe that university students should be allowed to
study
whatever they want, while others have an opinion that pupils should
study
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subjects which looks
usefuy
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useful
in the near
future
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agree with the statement that every individual can choose
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own university field.In the following
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will discuss both perspectives. On one hand,some people think if college learners have different options,
such
as: fashion,art,music and etc,they will be successful in their career due to the reason that they do not have to
study
something that they are not interested
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it.
For instance
,maybe in the foreseeable
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we will confront with
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field in job industry which we need artistic society rather than those who have
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in science.
furthermore
, nobody can predict
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and force others to learn something that they have no passion for it.In my view, nations of the world need professionals in all
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careers
career
. By the way, there is a group of folks who believe we live in the world of technology so
as a result
young races should
study
science, technology and computer.To cue evidence,in today's
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we all see that technology and internet improve rapidly,
thus
, it's kind of obvious that request for computer engineers or related jobs will increase at the later time,and
also
they will be higher salaries for
this
type of jobs. To draw a conclusion,my point of view is that each person who
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should have
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to make decisions for
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own life even if it is an awful determination.So,maybe above 70% of
future
jobs will be technological,but we still need other occupations as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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