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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #climate #change
It is argued by individuals that people should learn to live without trying to stop
climate
change
. I do agree with the statement, I believe that it is not our control to
change
 the
climate
 in the short term,
however
, it is possible to
change
 it in the long term. In
this
 essay, I am going to debate how can people contribute to avoiding
climate
change
 in the long term. I will
also
 give a suggestion of how people try to live with it.
First
 and foremost, it is commonly known that nowadays we have fewer issues regarding global,
climate
change
 due to global warming. Research believe that
climate
change
 could have a bad impact on people´s life. To illustrate it, petrol leads to an increase in global warming, the main reason is that it is affected by human´s activities by using transportation which uses petrol
such
 as drive cars, trains and flights, these are the transportations that use a lot of petrol.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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