Some People think one should stay all their life in the same job, whereas others advocate changing jobs from time to time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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continue to
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place
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to lose
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For instance
, my co-worker told me that she is working at the same
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18 years because she is not feeling confident to explore new
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and staff.
On the other hand
,some people really like to change their
work
with the passage of time, as they want to take different
job
responsibilities and
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to earn more money. In
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modern era, mostly the young generation is looking towards the bright future as
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desires are more so, they always acception highly paid jobs.
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the
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knowledge as people get the chance to explore new items through
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job
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,
although
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place
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new
job
makes a person happy.
Besides
this
, they will get a chance to learn something new and unique.
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  • job security
  • stability
  • financial insecurity
  • expertise
  • advance their careers
  • promotions
  • pay raises
  • recognition
  • personal and professional growth
  • work environments
  • responsibilities
  • skill set
  • adaptability
  • job satisfaction
  • mental health
  • stuck
  • stagnant
  • lucrative
  • job offers
  • commitment
  • instability
  • retirement plans
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