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it is expected that there will be higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development

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Older
people
 are expected to have
higher
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 population in many countries than young
people
.
This
 essay will discuss whether it is a positive or negative
development
. There is
the
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 important reason why having more elder
people
 will give us
benefit
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benefits
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.
To begin
 with, it is undeniable that older
people
 have been living longer than young
people
.
Hence
, they have seen more mistakes and problems.
As a result
, many solutions could be given from them. Sometimes they can guide us in the correct direction.
Although
 old
people
 give us some benefits, more positive
development
 of many countries are from younger
people
.
Firstly
, older
people
 are weaker than younger
people
, according to many
researches
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types of research
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. So, some experiments that might be possible are unable to do, due to the lack of strong human
resoures
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resources
.
Secondly
, older
people
 have undoubtedly seen the world more than younger
people
.
However
, seeing the world more sometimes draws a box to
theses
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these
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people
's
mind
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, it means that older
people
 have less creativity
compare
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 to younger
people
 who have seen less. For
illustrates
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, many old
people
 are very interesting in many present technologies, and mostly they have the same reason,
that is
 they have not expected the technology before. To conclude, in my opinion,
expection
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expectation
 of having older
people
 more than younger
people
 will give us more negative
development
 than
positive
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a positive
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development
.
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