it is expected that there will be higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in future. Do you think it is a positive or negative development

Older
people
are expected to have
higher
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population in many countries than young
people
.
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essay will discuss whether it is a positive or negative
development
. There is
the
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important reason why having more elder
people
will give us
benefit
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.
To begin
with, it is undeniable that older
people
have been living longer than young
people
.
Hence
, they have seen more mistakes and problems.
As a result
, many solutions could be given from them. Sometimes they can guide us in the correct direction.
Although
old
people
give us some benefits, more positive
development
of many countries are from younger
people
.
Firstly
, older
people
are weaker than younger
people
, according to many
researches
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. So, some experiments that might be possible are unable to do, due to the lack of strong human
resoures
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resources
.
Secondly
, older
people
have undoubtedly seen the world more than younger
people
.
However
, seeing the world more sometimes draws a box to
theses
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people
's
mind
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, it means that older
people
have less creativity
compare
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to younger
people
who have seen less. For
illustrates
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, many old
people
are very interesting in many present technologies, and mostly they have the same reason,
that is
they have not expected the technology before. To conclude, in my opinion,
expection
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expectation
of having older
people
more than younger
people
will give us more negative
development
than
positive
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a positive
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development
.
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