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Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetable in 2002, 2006 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The bar chart illustrates that how many fruits and vegetables were consumed by the people of
UK
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the UK
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 in the years 2002,2006 and 2010
percentage wise
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percentage-wise
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. Overall, the amount of
fruit
 and
vegetable
eaten
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are eaten
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 by
men
 and
children
 experience a downward trend,
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whereas
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where as
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whereas
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 women had ingested
greater
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a greater
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 amount of
fruit
 and
vegetable
 than
men
 and
children
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throughout
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through out
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throughout
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 the period.
Furthermore
, all the years had some fluctuations as well. At the beginning of the period, the number of
fruit
 and
vegetable
 consumed by women was about 25% which increased up to 7% in the year 2006
however
, it experienced a downward trend of approximately 6% after four years.
Men
 and
children
 who had eaten 22% and 11% of
fruit
 and
vegetable
 in 2002 increased up to almost 26% and 18% in 2006. It again decreased to about 24% and 16% respectively. The bar chart shows that women preferred to consume more
fruit
 and
vegetable
 than
men
 and
children
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