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the primary hobbies of the adult residents in a small Tunisian town in three different years with 20 years interval,starting from 1980.

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The given bar chart and line chart illustrate the information about the primary hobbies of the adult residents in a small Tunisian town in three different years with 20 years interval,starting from 1980. The general overview here is that adults whacking TV and Movies the most throughout the periods. According to the chart, it can be seen that all activities shared a similar figure of 100 in 1980. There is a significant movement after passing 40 years. The figure for TV and Movie rose dramatically to 130 in 2000 and 160 in 2020.
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, books and working out experienced an upward trend, between 2000 and 2020,with books rising to 117 and 133 consecutively, and working out increased slightly to 105 and 110 respectively in the same period.
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, a decrease was seen in the number of baking, dropping from 95 in 2000 to 90 in 2020.
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, gardening indicated a steady decline to 83 and 63 respectively in a similar period.
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, there was a similar decrease for Video games, dropping to 40 after four decades.
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, there was a period of stability of 100 in the number of playing music over the periods observed.
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