Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

Nowadays there are more and more
people
meet
serious
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problem
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problems
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with sleep. They can not find a way to get enough and well sleep during
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day.
This phenomena
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will impact
on
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their health if it still occurs for
long
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time
. And in some
case
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, some
people
also
get
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because of lack of sleep. There are several reasons that many
people
do not have enough sleep and we will discuss more details in the following passages. But I think the main reason is due to working hours. They have to work for
long
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time
to finish their duties. They
also
have to use more
time
on the road due to traffic
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. And when they come back home, they must not only prepare dinner for
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family,
also
help children to do
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homework
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home work
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.
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that, they
also
need to walk up early for a new day.
On the other hand
, other
people
also
use
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of spare
time
for using mobile
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with many social media
such
as Facebook, Zalo, Twister to chat with their friends and colleagues either. And
then
they go to bed too late which is not a proper
time
for
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start sleeping. In order to get enough sleep, they should re-arrange
our
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job and leisure activities. If
distance
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from a house to
work place
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is too far, they should buy or rent a house which near to office in order to reduce the travel
time
every day. They
also
should not use social media after 9pm and try to go the bed before 9:30 pm in the evening. And
then
we can start to have a deep sleep at 10pm which is
proper
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time
for sleeping as
suggest
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by many
Doctor
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and
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. In conclusion, for a healthy life, they should find a reason why they could not sleep well and
then
find a solution to treat them in a flexible method.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Insomnia
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sleep quality
  • Fatigue
  • Exhaustion
  • Restless
  • Restorative sleep
  • REM sleep
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Napping
  • Sleep duration
  • Melatonin
  • Sleep-inducing
  • Drowsiness
  • Sleep disturbances
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Snoring
  • Sleepwalking
  • Sleep talking
  • Shift work
  • Sleeping pills
  • Sleep aid
  • Relaxation techniques
  • Meditation
  • Deep breathing
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