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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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In a rapidly developing world populations are increasing day by day, and to
fulfill
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 their basic
food
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 requirement we should turn to genetically modified
crops
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 in order to increase
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food
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 grains
production
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. As genetically engineered varieties can be the only source to
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food
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 necessity, as per population
growing
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 in developing world . P1- more
production
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 in less area and time ,less pesticide,more nutrients P2-
health
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 issue, employment will decrease On the one hand, Genetically modified
crops
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plays
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 a vital role in
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 grains
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. The advantage of
GM
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crops
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 is they help farmers to grow more
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area
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 with less pesticide and more nutrients.
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, Genetically modified
crops
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 are cheaper than NON-
GM
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crops
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.
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, In 2010
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 of corn was 85% in US and cotton was 13.5% worldwide with the help of
GM
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 varieties.
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adverse
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 effect on
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 body which can lead to various disease like cancer etc.
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,
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production
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 of
Gm
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crops
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are
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 inherently unstable.
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, with
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he
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 help of
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 technology employment ratio
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 as compared to normal farming.
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recent research it is observed that people prefer less hybrid
food
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 as they feel consumption of
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food
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 can lead to various health
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 and are not aware of healthy nutrients . To conclude, One has to opt for Genetically engineered varieties as these only can solve the
food
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 problem which is
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 necessity of life in
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 developing nation.
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