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In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (e.g literatures), boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? Do you agree or disagree?

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Many academic institutions prefer to accept
women
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stream
 and men
to
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science
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stream
.
This
 is due to
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peer pressure and social malpractice . I stand against
this
 method because of the inequality based on sex and the adverse repercussion of
this
 incorrect portrayal of both these genders. The main reason for female scholars
are
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 restricted to certain education
stream
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 is , because e of the social stigma on
women
 , as weaker subjects. Society has labelled
female
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females
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 with multiple commitments on
household
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 .
Hence
 , a potential career would disrupt society’s expectation
on
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 being a typical housewife .
Therefore
 , ladies are compelled to follow less fortunate jobs with
lack
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 of improvement .
In addition
 , some religions
also
 have strict guidelines on ladies qualifications.
On the other hand
 , masculinity is seen in general as a strong group , which can handle complex tasks .
Also
 , many cultures origin from
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male-dominant
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male
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the male
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 dominant
background
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.
As a result
 , men have more freedom in
selection
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 of their future prospects than
women
. At the same time , they tend to follow professions , which has more scope and
self esteem
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.
This
 misunderstanding
on
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women
 inferiority should be abolished. Mainly , considering
on
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the capacity and talent womanhood has shown the world .
For example
 . Angela Markel , who
lead
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 Germany during the worst economic crisis is a bold female figure. She is a
real life
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 example that
women
also
 are capable of handling crucial tasks better than men. To add
further
 , gender discrimination is
widely
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 debated topic which is referred to be spoiling
the
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unity . Most of the developed countries emphasize equality for all genders .
This
 will create an
open minded
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 society with greater sustainability in economy and culture. Conclusively , students from both these genders should follow their aspired education
stream
 and they should not undergo any pressure from the community .
This
 will be a greater benefit for human civilization
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • unconsciously
  • proficiency
  • bias
  • segmentation
  • perceived
  • prevalent
  • encourage
  • influence
  • role models
  • early education
  • traditional norms
  • societal expectations
  • tendency
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