You have learned that a financial organisation in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter, • give your qualifications and work experience • give details about the course • explain how this course will help you

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to receive more detailed information regarding a loan for students or employees who would like to be enrolled in a course which has been recently announced by your bank on a local business radio show.

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year I graduated from Durham University in London where I obtained a bachelor degree in Physics. Since my

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I have been working as a Physical education teacher in ABC boarding school. I have gained valuable insights in teaching disabled adolescents and now I

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am interested in studying child psychology. Every year in spring Durham University conducts a course which is based on the subject of psychology concerning children. They offer a comprehensive six-month-long curriculum intended to obtain basic knowledge in

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field along with one-month practice in a children hospital. Being a teacher in the

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where I work requires me to have some basic understanding of children’s mindset;

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I am confident that studying in Durham will provide me with essential information which I could apply during my work duties. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Zara Martin

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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189 words

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