In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment what factors may have caused this situation and what in your opinion can or should be done about it give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

A
number
of loopholes in
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law and long-term education policies have resulted in
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situation. Educational attitudes and some laws are contributing factors in
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situation of unemployment. In the
first
place, a lack of balance between the
number
of alumni and openings might be considered as an effective reason
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in
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vast unemployment.
In other words
, the
number
of former university students overweighs the
number
of professional vacancies.
Secondly
, some employers have a great enticement to reduce their expenses,
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tend to recruit staffs as few as possible and force the employees to overwork in order to accomplish the workloads. To tackle
this
issue,
policy makers
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, especially the ones who are in charge of adjusting
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system, should have definite statistics of potential industrial, medical and other professional occupations in order to admit enough students to the universities. By applying
this
long-term policy the
number
of university graduates and vacancies will be congruent. As an added remedy, a brand new
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law should be ratified or at least the current laws should be redressed to restrict the authority of employees in applying mandatory
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working to their workforces.
Therefore
, employers will be obliged to recruit
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number
of degree owners that obviously decreases
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rate. In conclusion, more demands of
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in comparison with work opportunities might
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caused by lack of long-term student-admitting policies and employers over-authorities .
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