Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?

Students during today's
time
much more
time
spend on violent
games
and do some activity
thus
they like to do
this
and offspring do not focus on study and they playing
games
and video
games
every day with their friend circle. they do some behaviour
this
playing
games
that
games
of crimes. Nowadays
children
see fighting films and drugs-related
movies
offspring do like some activity and they are play fighting video
games
and on the phone see the evil cinema because offspring like to live alone and they don'
t
spend
time
with their parents and they do like Bollywood and Hollywood
movies
in the
movies
bad effect on the
children
and some
children
don'
t
do study and they are not do read the book and they don'
t
like do any work that's why they start do crimes in towns for earn money. They don'
t
spend the most
time
in school. I am strongly agreeing with
this
and I believe that the latest technology and limited relationships have a considerable impact on
this
situation. On the other ,hand
children
should spend the
time
with their parents and they can read books and study related to the
movies
in their free
time
. Government should do that banned the
movies
which
movies
use weapons and guns because if that
movies
and
games
do bane
then
crimes level decrease in the urban areas and
children
's parents should mostly spend
time
with kids
thus
lowering crime in cities.
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