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Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?

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Students during today's
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 much more
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 spend on violent
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 and do some activity
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 they like to do
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 and offspring do not focus on study and they playing
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 and video
games
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 every day with their friend circle. they do some behaviour
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 playing
games
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 that
games
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 of crimes. Nowadays
children
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 see fighting films and drugs-related
movies
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 offspring do like some activity and they are play fighting video
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 and on the phone see the evil cinema because offspring like to live alone and they don'
t
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 spend
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 with their parents and they do like Bollywood and Hollywood
movies
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 in the
movies
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 bad effect on the
children
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 and some
children
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 don'
t
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 do study and they are not do read the book and they don'
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 like do any work that's why they start do crimes in towns for earn money. They don'
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 spend the most
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 in school. I am strongly agreeing with
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 and I believe that the latest technology and limited relationships have a considerable impact on
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 situation. On the other ,hand
children
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 should spend the
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 with their parents and they can read books and study related to the
movies
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 in their free
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. Government should do that banned the
movies
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 which
movies
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 use weapons and guns because if that
movies
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 and
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 do bane
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 crimes level decrease in the urban areas and
children
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's parents should mostly spend
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 with kids
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 lowering crime in cities.
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