In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Although

some

people

believe that it is vital for governments to allot allow (??) a huge considerable amount of money to establish new rails for modern

trains

, in my opinion, it is better to spend money on current public transportation to make them better. On the one hand, it is believed by some that decision-makers had better pay more attention to current public transportations and I agree.

This

( it may be unclear who or what THAT refer to. Consider rewriting the sentence to remove unclear reference ) is because updating them is more affordable compared to

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building new rails and could be done at a more frantic pace.

Furthermore

,

people

use public transportation every single day for accomplishing their daily routines,

such

as commuting to their workplace or shopping, while .

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trains

are used mostly mainly for long trips which would happen often

often

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happen in on public holidays.

Therefore

improving public transportations are more beneficial for individual's life.

On the other hand

, it is claimed by some that state authorities should donate a considerable budget to building new rails for high-speed

trains

. The proponents claim that fast

trains

could lessen the time spent on

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and bring more convenience for

travelers

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.

This

could motivate more

people

to make a trip to even remote areas, which undoubtedly provide great opportunities for locals. The more passengers visit a new location

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the more job opportunities are created for the residents, which could, gradually, lead to the economic prosperity of these areas.

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a result, creating new rail networks for modern

trains

is advantageous for the economy of a country a country’s economy. In conclusion, many(?)

people

vary in their opinions; I think if rulers spent more money on updating present public transport modes

instead

of railroads,

people

will

would

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reap more benefits.