Parents should encourage children to spend less time on studying and more time on doing physical activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In my opinion, studying and participating in physical workouts have the same importance to the development of

children

.

Therefore

, parents should try to balance the a

mount

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of time

children

spend f

or

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both these types of activities. On the one hand, it is important for a

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children

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children

to be well-educated. S

pend

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time studying can help

children

to train their ability in logical thinking and hard-working. These skills n

ot

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only shown i

t

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their

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value to increase the productivity of the students at school,

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but

also

very b

enefitial

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beneficial

for their life after graduation. It can be argued that these skills provide more jobs opportunities, career progression, better salaries, and

therefore

improve the quality of life for students who have them.

Moreover

, it is

also

crucial to ensure our

next

human generation have enough knowledge to continue t

he h

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umanity’s development. They are the future world leaders, so giving them a better education can result in the latter new inventions, economic growth or greater future prosperity.

On the other hand

, physical workouts

also

play an important role in the life of a child. Doing regular body exercises is b

elieve

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to be b

enefitial

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beneficial

for t

he

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children

’s health, especially for the immune system,

thus

h

elp

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to reduce the risk of

children

s

uffer

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from m

any

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any

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k

ind

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of diseases

such

as obesity or n

ear-sighted.

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near-sightedness

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Physical activities

also

force youngsters m

ake

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contact with the nearby society, m

ake

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them more s

ocialize

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and out-going. B

eside,

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playing sports is

also

effective in reducing the stress and anxiousness for

children

, which i

s often occur

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to students recently In conclusion, physical activities and study are both necessary for

children

,

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and should receive equally concern from parents