The pie charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given charts compare the proportion of
time
that people
in the 18-26 age group and senior citizens allocate time
to plenty internet
activities in Change preposition
of internet
leisure
Correct pronoun usage
their leisure
time
.
As can be observed, people
from 18-26 years of age spend time
on socical
networking Correct your spelling
social
is
the highest, Unnecessary verb
apply
while
elderly people
use time
for making Correct pronoun usage
their time
Add an article
a booking
the booking
booking
.
The percentage of young Fix the agreement mistake
bookings
people
for reaserching
, which stand at 20%, is 6 times Correct your spelling
researching
as
less as that of senior citizens. There are 18% of the playing game in youngsters Correct word choice
apply
while
the figure for
old Change preposition
apply
people
make
up only 6%. Social networking Change the verb form
makes
account
for 24% of the Change the verb form
accounts
time
that people
between 18 and 26 in comparision
with only 8% Correct your spelling
comparison
elderly
Change preposition
of elderly
people
counterparts.
Standing at 21%, the proportion that the young allocated time
for accessing music and films is 4 times as
less Correct word choice
apply
as
that Change preposition
than
aged
Change preposition
of aged
people
. The usage time
for making booking
in the young is considerably Add an article
a booking
the booking
fewer
than that Correct quantifier usage
less
people
from 60-70 years of age, standing at 5% as opposed to 29%. Using Change preposition
of people
time
to make purchases represented 12% of the online activities of the young whereas
that of older people
recored
a slightly higher figure, at 14%.Correct your spelling
recorded
reported
record
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, people with synonyms.
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