Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In the modern world,
music
some individuals believe that
music
is a tool for gathering
people
from everywhere in the world to become one. In my perspective, I agree with
this
idea and
this
essay will show you the supporting reasons.
Music
plays an important role in creating the unity of
people
because
this
is the only thing that
people
from different backgrounds have in common. No matter who they are, where they come from or how old are they,
people
still enjoy the same melodic and rhythmic patterns of
music
.
In other words
,
music
make
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them speak the same language. In spite of, unable to understand the meaning of the lyrics, they
still
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satisfy
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with the rhythm and enjoy the vibe of the song. The listener can feel what is the exact message from the
song writer
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.
This
means that, in terms of
music
, there is no language barrier
unlike
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any other
conversations
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Moreover
, it can reduce the generation gap among
people
in
the
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society. Talking about my
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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