People hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer. You should use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

A number of individuals utilise their
leisure
period as other members of the
society
do, which
had
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has
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changed as
the
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apply
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time
passes by.
This
essay strongly agrees with
this
statement as it will discuss
the
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apply
show examples
digitisation
and the economic
effects
impact
on various timelines. To initiate with,
digitisation
is one of the vital factors that
effects
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affects
show examples
on
Change preposition
apply
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how
Correct article usage
a persons
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persons
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person
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leisure
time
are utilised. Societies have changed significantly all over the
world
in the
last
three decades when the
men
used to idle
time
for gardening and the
women
were busy with numerous types of
craft
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crafts
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building on clothes and other components, whereas now
men
are spending
time
with
computer
games, which is learnt from the
influence
of the
society
and
women
are spending
time
with the gardening culture. In Bangladesh,
for instance
, the
Computer
journal published a report, which indicates an increase of 80%
men
professionals
, who can afford a computing
PlayStation
,
switch
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switches
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their
leisure
activities
due to the
influence
of their
colleagues
in the
last
10 years, which is influenced by their
colleagues
.
Therefore
,
digitisation
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
serious
Add an article
a serious
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impact
on
leisure
activities
as they copy their
colleagues
.
In contrast
, economic
effects
had played a part on the globe while changing
leisure
activities
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society
. As the developed countries
high income
Add a hyphen
high-income
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holders have only switched their
leisure
activities
cause
of affordability;
nevertheless
, technology will not be economical unless it is utilised, which can be followed from the trend of the mature economy.
For example
, In The United States of America over 90% of male
professionals
are playing
PlayStation
in their spare
time
, according to the source of the daily mail as the
price
is
affordable
Add an article
the affordable
an affordable
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cause
of high demands. To conclude,
digitisation
is changing
society
’s
leisure
activity all over the
world
from traditional
activities
such
as gardening or
craft
.
On the other hand
,
absence
Correct article usage
the absence
show examples
of
Correct article usage
an economical
show examples
economical
Replace the word
economic
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price
is influencing the change slowly in various parts of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society
. A number of individuals utilise their
leisure
period as other members of the
society
do, which
had
Wrong verb form
has
show examples
changed as
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
time
passes by.
This
essay strongly agrees with
this
statement as it will discuss
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
digitisation
and the economic
effects
impact
on various timelines. To initiate with,
digitisation
is one of the vital factors that
effects
Correct your spelling
affects
show examples
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
how
Correct article usage
a persons
show examples
persons
Change the noun form
person
show examples
leisure
time
are utilised. Societies have changed significantly all over the
world
in the
last
three decades when the
men
used to idle
time
for gardening and the
women
were busy with numerous types of
craft
Fix the agreement mistake
crafts
show examples
building on clothes and other components, whereas now
men
are spending
time
with
computer
games, which is learnt from the
influence
of the
society
and
women
are spending
time
with the gardening culture. In Bangladesh,
for instance
, the
Computer
journal published a report, which indicates an increase of 80%
men
professionals
, who can afford a computing
PlayStation
,
switch
Change the verb form
switches
show examples
their
leisure
activities
due to the
influence
of their
colleagues
in the
last
10 years, which is influenced by their
colleagues
.
Therefore
,
digitisation
have
Change the verb form
has
show examples
serious
Add an article
a serious
show examples
impact
on
leisure
activities
as they copy their
colleagues
.
In contrast
, economic
effects
had played a part on the globe while changing
leisure
activities
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society
. As the developed countries
high income
Add a hyphen
high-income
show examples
holders have only switched their
leisure
activities
cause
of affordability;
nevertheless
, technology will not be economical unless it is utilised, which can be followed from the trend of the mature economy.
For example
, In The United States of America over 90% of male
professionals
are playing
PlayStation
in their spare
time
, according to the source of the daily mail as the
price
is
affordable
Add an article
the affordable
an affordable
show examples
cause
of high demands. To conclude,
digitisation
is changing
society
’s
leisure
activity all over the
world
from traditional
activities
such
as gardening or
craft
.
On the other hand
,
absence
Correct article usage
the absence
show examples
of
Correct article usage
an economical
show examples
economical
Replace the word
economic
show examples
price
is influencing the change slowly in various parts of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society
.
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