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In the future, the main reason for reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent decades, shopping
malls
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 and department stores have rapidly developed. We can see the effects on the economics of the world. I,
therefore
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, believe it's obvious that lots of changes can happen for the shopping
malls
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 system and its structure shortly. I completely believe and see that as soon as possible we will have that opportunity to go to shopping
malls
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, for experiencing entertainment
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 as going climbing and even skiing. Predictably, cutting-edge technology can cause great variations in the usage of shopping
malls
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.
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, lots of shopping
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 nowadays have restaurants and even some of them own cinemas,
theaters
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theatres
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, and bowling alleys, it's fascinating that you can have both shops and entertainment places under one roof. Currently, most people don't go to shopping
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 just for shopping, they mostly go there for meetings and a great atmosphere and
colorful
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 shops it has,
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 because of the new online
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's people are
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 prefer to
shop
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 online conveniently due to easy access to the internet.
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 in my situation whenever I would like to buy anything,
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 I check online shops and
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 if there is nothing suitable to buy I refer to shopping
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,
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 another key point prefer to
shop
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 online is massive traffic lines, in my hometown.
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, I enjoyed shopping at huge
malls
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 cause, in my opinion, you can try on clothes and get advice on products from the
shop
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 assistant and make the right choice. In conclusion, I know and believe shopping
malls
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 should be strongly changed their systems in a few years, and it will affect our lives.
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 online shoes should be on priority for buying goods or clothes
instead
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 of massive shopping
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