In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into the cities. Why do you think this happens? What problems can this cause?

The migration of
people
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from
villages
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to urban areas has increased in many developing nations.The main reason for
people
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migrating is for better employment opportunities
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to improve their living conditions.Unfortunately,
this
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has led to more problems,wherein farmlands are left unattended and old parents are left behind to fend for themselves.
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essay will discuss the problems caused
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of migration and
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a possible solution to overcome
it
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. The main reason
people
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migrate to other
places
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is for better job opportunities and
increased
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pay scale.Many multi-national companies are based in the urban areas
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more job options and higher packages.
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in
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villages
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the villages
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.
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, the living conditions of the public are improved.Workers can
get to
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live in good accommodations with round-the-clock electricity and
drinking
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a drinking
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water supply compared to the
villages
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.These reasons encourage
public
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the public
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to move away from their hometowns. Migrating from hometowns
create
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creates
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complication
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for the relatives,who are left behind.Local
people
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often move to cities
leaving
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, leaving
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behind their dependents
like
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old parents,who are placed in a helpless situation.
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home for the older generation because their children have gone to other
places
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to earn money.
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,the fertile
agriculture
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farms are left unattended with no one to cultivate them
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a shortage of young men.
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may lead to food shortages in the future.
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issue can be solved by encouraging more companies to set up their operations in small
places
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and to provide funds to the farmers.
To sum up
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,
although
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it is good to move to other
places
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for higher income and better living,the problems caused by it are
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far more.With no one to take care of relatives and the lands left unused,the future of
villages
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looks bleak.The best solution for
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problem is to increase jobs for the local
people
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as well as
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inject funds for them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • move
  • move to
  • rural
  • city
  • urban
  • job
  • jobs
  • work
  • pay
  • money
  • education
  • school
  • training
  • skill
  • health
  • health care
  • hospital
  • transport
  • road
  • train
  • bus
  • housing
  • home
  • rent
  • crowding
  • overcrowding
  • traffic
  • pollution
  • noise
  • stress
  • unemployment
  • unemployed
  • farming
  • farm
  • harvest
  • drought
  • weather
  • climate
  • service
  • services
  • government
  • policy
  • plan
  • development
  • industry
  • factory
  • brain drain
  • youth
  • young
  • family
  • relatives
  • remittance
  • send money
  • village
  • country side
  • city life
  • city centre
  • rural area
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