Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on society. Others deny that these have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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As we know that

people

these days have a great impact

towards

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technology

as the whole world is revolving

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it.A small part of the

society

trusts that the brutality shown

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computer games and

telivision

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television

has a negative impact on

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society

.In my

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would state the above statement to be true.The above essay will elaborate on why

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wished to choose that option. The

telvision

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television

and computers these days are just influencing kids these days towards the negative path.As kids at a very early age are just known for imprinting whatever they see.

For instance

,many kids in different countries in teenage are getting abducted for

substancial

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substantial

drugs and many for killing

people

.In countries like America the crime rate is getting increased rapidly daily,the main reason could be the adverse effect of watching

voilence

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violence

in movies.They are just trying to act like the superheroes like them but

eventually

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they are becoming a murderer, by the

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time they are realizing it is getting very late for them. Another reason could be, as

people

are always looking on their phone

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of talking to

people

around

this

is one of

reasons

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due to which

people

are lacking

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moral values.If a person always

look

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at crimes and cruelty they wouldn't know whatever they are doing is according to

society

virtues.For

exmaple

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example

,many scientists have proved that your brain

listen

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to social beings more

then

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watching movies due to trust

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between humans and as we are social beings we tend to get attracted more towards

people

acts. We are staying in a

society

where starting from an infant to the very old

citzen

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citizen

everyone has

technology

.Everyone is getting so involved in using them at times mostly

tennagers

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teenagers

are forgetting their responsibilities towards

society

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due to

this

technology

and as

people

are always involved in the

technology

as they are forgetting about the world and

loosing

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morals which are most needed for

people

to sustain on

this

globe.

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desensitize
aggressive behavior
emotional and psychological development
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empathy
contributing factor
distinction
fiction and reality
mature audiences
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