Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. Discuss both the points and give your opinion.

The line graph demonstrates the data on overseas
students
from Vietnam who studied in
France
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Russian
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France
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million
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Russian
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in
America
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stability at 2.5
million
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • broader perspective
  • company's goals and strategy
  • informed decisions
  • align with the company's vision
  • boost morale
  • higher job satisfaction
  • productivity
  • experience and expertise
  • complex decisions
  • company's success
  • hands-on experience
  • insights
  • practical solutions
  • innovative ideas
  • extensive consultation
  • faster response times
  • competitive market
  • collaborative work culture
  • improve communication
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