People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less?

Nowadays, there are more and more consuming sugar-based
drinks
. The following paragraphs indicate why
this
situation is more popular and the keys to
decrease
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this
sugar-based
drinks
demand. The main reasons are that sugar-based
drinks
are cheap and help
people
save
time
. Generally, sugar-based
drinks
refer to any beverage with added sugar or other sweeteners, whose typical examples are soft
drinks
and energy
drinks
.
Firstly
, sugar-based
drinks
are so cheap that
people
hardly decline to
drink
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. In the competitive market, the price of soft
drinks
and energy
drinks
is
more and more cheap
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cheaper and cheaper
cheaper
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and
specially
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cheaper than other
drinks
such
as
smoothie
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smoothies
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and
juice
.
For example
, a 1,5 lit bottle of Coca-Cola costs about 18.000 VND, whereas a
300 milliliter
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bottle of watermelon
juice
costs 18.000 VND, too. Nextly, because of having a busy life,
people
do not have
time
to wait for water bartenders to make
drinks
. Sugar-based
drinks
like soft
drinks
and energy
drinks
are widely sold at vending machines or
cantines
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canines
canteens
in
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work or school.
In contrast
,
smoothie
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smoothies
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and
juice
are seldom sold there;
therefore
, when
people
want to
drink
them, they must order on a booking application or buy directly at a shop, which takes lots of
time
. A busy person, of course, usually chooses sugar-based
drinks
as the sole choice. In that sugar-based
drinks
are really not good for health,
people
should
drink
less. With the
first
reason below, the government needs to increase tax on these products to decrease unnecessary consumption.
Besides
people
really buy them for economic reasons, there are many
people
who just buy them because of their laziness. Consumers can solve
this
problem by making
drinks
themselves to save money or buying smoothies and
juice
at a shop. The way to solve the other problem about saving
time
is instructing
people
to manage their
time
more efficiently to have more
time
to
drink
themselves or buy
smoothie
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smoothies
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and
juice
. When being able to control
time
,
people
have more free
time
to do more meaningful things;
therefore
, not only is
this
way useful to health but
also
good for their life.
People
can easily learn to control
time
through online courses on Youtube or Coursera. Briefly, the problem of
people
consuming more and more sugar-based
drinks
is caused by a number of factors as discussed above. Increasing taxes on sugar-based
drinks
and instructing
people
to manage their
time
more efficiently are two feasible solutions to combat
such
problems.
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