People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less?

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Nowadays, there are more and more consuming sugar-based
drinks
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. The following paragraphs indicate why
this
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situation is more popular and the keys to
decrease
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this
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sugar-based
drinks
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demand. The main reasons are that sugar-based
drinks
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are cheap and help
people
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save
time
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. Generally, sugar-based
drinks
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refer to any beverage with added sugar or other sweeteners, whose typical examples are soft
drinks
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and energy
drinks
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.
Firstly
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, sugar-based
drinks
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are so cheap that
people
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hardly decline to
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drink
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. In the competitive market, the price of soft
drinks
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and energy
drinks
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is
more and more cheap
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cheaper and cheaper
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and
specially
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cheaper than other
drinks
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such
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as
smoothie
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smoothies
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and
juice
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.
For example
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, a 1,5 lit bottle of Coca-Cola costs about 18.000 VND, whereas a
300 milliliter
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300-milliliter
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bottle of watermelon
juice
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costs 18.000 VND, too. Nextly, because of having a busy life,
people
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do not have
time
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to wait for water bartenders to make
drinks
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. Sugar-based
drinks
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like soft
drinks
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and energy
drinks
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are widely sold at vending machines or
cantines
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canines
canteens
in
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at
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work or school.
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,
smoothie
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smoothies
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and
juice
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are seldom sold there;
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, when
people
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want to
drink
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them, they must order on a booking application or buy directly at a shop, which takes lots of
time
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. A busy person, of course, usually chooses sugar-based
drinks
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as the sole choice. In that sugar-based
drinks
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are really not good for health,
people
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should
drink
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less. With the
first
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reason below, the government needs to increase tax on these products to decrease unnecessary consumption.
Besides
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people
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really buy them for economic reasons, there are many
people
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who just buy them because of their laziness. Consumers can solve
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problem by making
drinks
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themselves to save money or buying smoothies and
juice
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at a shop. The way to solve the other problem about saving
time
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is instructing
people
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to manage their
time
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more efficiently to have more
time
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to
drink
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themselves or buy
smoothie
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smoothies
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and
juice
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. When being able to control
time
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,
people
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have more free
time
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to do more meaningful things;
therefore
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, not only is
this
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way useful to health but
also
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good for their life.
People
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can easily learn to control
time
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through online courses on Youtube or Coursera. Briefly, the problem of
people
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consuming more and more sugar-based
drinks
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is caused by a number of factors as discussed above. Increasing taxes on sugar-based
drinks
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and instructing
people
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to manage their
time
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more efficiently are two feasible solutions to combat
such
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problems.
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