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Nowadays, the traditions and customs of the food we eat and the way we eat it are changing what is the way they have change and what do you think about the change.

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In the past, when students did a
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 degree, they tend to
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 in their own
country
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. Nowadays, they have more
opportunity
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 to
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 abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of
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 development
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 Education plays a significant role in our lives. Students are going overseas for studies lately as they getting a number of opportunities.
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, back in the 2000s, pupils stayed in their
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 to get graduated. In
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 essay, we will discuss studying abroad's merits and demerits. To start with advantages, the most benefit is people get a huge amount of scholarships to attend university overseas.
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, developed countries like the USA, Canada, UK need more immigrants to run their states.
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, they lower their English test score for
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 and for permanent residency as well.
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, international colleges have completely different teaching method, which is more focused on practical knowledge than theoretical knowledge.
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, a survey shows that employers are giving higher salary those who completed their studies in a foreign.
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, studying overseas has disadvantages too. Mainly, children feel homesick and they feel low. Coming from Asian countries like China or India to the USA or Canada, Chinese or Indian people can tend to have a cultural shock in the
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 month.
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, as we know, weather plays a vital role in human minds. Freshmen easily get sick or ill.
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, the cost of
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 in the developed territories is way higher than in their own countries.
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, the foreign student pays 3 times more money than local students of that
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 to get the degree. In conclusion, some people still choose their own
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 to get a degree.
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, attending and studying abroad university has more advantages that outweigh the demerits of studying internationally. It is a matter of preference.
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